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hi! this is my first this to write the blog. my name is tony Lau .my birthday is in the 7 th november .I am a student so i am not job to do .my family with are people ,there are father mother brother sister and me. i live in lok fu , I am very like lok fu because my one year old to 17 years with live... 顯示更多 hi! this is my first this to write the blog. my name is tony Lau .my birthday is in the 7 th november .I am a student so i am not job to do .my family with are people , there are father mother brother sister and me. i live in lok fu , I am very like lok fu because my one year old to 17 years with live in lok fu . there are many park ,in my childhood in the park i am knowledge the many fd .my interest is are play football ,in the sunday my fd and me sometime go to play football .at leisure i like play the computer i feel play computer is very happy .i feel in the this blog i am learn toengish .i will in the monday to firday go to write the blog http://www.wretch.cc/blog/lcy1171991/21169194 呢個係我的BLOG 我一有空就會寫一篇希望有網友可 以幫我修改一下我的作文 更新: 多謝甘多位網友 我希望你們可以有時間上我的blog 幫我修改我的文章 提升我的英文水平... http://www.wretch.cc/blog/lcy1171991

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Hi, Hi! This is my first time to write something on my blog. My name is Tony Lau .My birthday is on the 7 th of November .I am a student so I have no job .About my family, I live with my parents, my brother and sister in Lok Fu and I like this place very much because I grew up in this district since birth. There are many parks, supermarkets and useful facilities. I remember that I met many kids in my childhood .One of my hobbies is playing football. My friends and I sometimes play that on Sunday. .In my leisure time, I like playing on my computer too because it makes me happy.I guess I am able to learn more English from this blog and I will come here to write more and more from Monday to Friday. Tony, I would like to tell you a few things about your English. 1) When you use the pronoun" I", do not forget to use a capital letter. 2) For some nouns, you have to capitalize them too. 3) Try to read more so as to learn how a proper sentence is formed. 4) Try to use different words to talk about something that has been mentioned previously. 5) Always capitalize the first word in a sentence. 6) Learn how to combine broken sentences. Example: 1) I live in Lok Fu. My father, mother and me .......... Combining these now********************** Watch me! O_O I live with my parents, brother and sister in Lok Fu. Done! See it is not hard at all:) Good luck with your studies. See you around, Tony.

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hi! this is my first time to write in my blog. My name is Tony Lau. My birthday is on 7th November. I am a student so I am not working. In my family, there is a father, a mother, a brother, a sister and me. I live in Lok Fu. I like Lok Fu very much because I have been living here since one year old. There are many parks here. When I was small, I met a lot of friends in the park. My interest is playing football. On Sunday my friend and I go to play football. I like to play computer games to spare my time. I feel happy when I play computer games. I hope I can learn English when writing in this blog. I will write in this blog from Monday to Friday.